Jasmine Hart

Yay! A new poem by Matt! I love your poetry! This begins well. I'd add some sort of punctuation after "concrete." I love; "Scuffed footprints." It's a great image. I ...

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I'm writing a plotless play.

I love it, but I'd use a capital M for Michaelangelo! Your imagery is amazing, and the enjambment helped it flow which I think helped create the peaceful nature of ...

Hi. I think that the interspersing of the song was a tad bizarre. The contrast of the slow song and Jack's running is a bit strange. If you have a ...

Hi. This flows well and you handle the rhyme scheme well. The first "your" should be "you're". If you're ever uncertain, stop and ask yourself if it would make more ...

Hi. You're right, I think this needs to be longer, but I'll get to that in a minute, after I look at what you have already. To be brutally honest ...

I love and adore this. Feel free to PM me/post in my "Will Review For Food" thread if you want any other poetry reviewed, as I'd love to read more ...

Hey. Welcome to YWS. I hope you'll like it here. "Will Review For Food" is good if you ever need a review. You'll find it under "General Discussion". I'm not ...

Hi Jenny. Welcome to YWS!What sort of things do you write? If you're interested in collaboration, check out "The Double Trouble Writing Huddle"-you'll find it if you click "groups." And ...

Hi. Welcome to YWS! What sort of stories/novels do you write? Jas

Hi! Welcome to YWS! I hope you like it here. I think the others have told you everything you need to know, but if you have any questions, just ask. ...

Hi. I'd recommend joining the user group "The Double-Trouble Writing Huddle". That's a section especially for people who want to do a co-write. I think that you'd have more success ...

Hi. This flows well overall, but it's jerky in parts, for example; "Ease their pain And defend the believers; Melt those hearts of stone. " I'd try reading it aloud ...

Hi. This flows well. I like; "like a memory lost" and " self consumer of my woes". These are interesting and fresh lines, beautifully worded. I don't think the repetition ...